任務 1:常見的審題錯誤彙總
以下是我總結的中國考生常見的影響得分的三個問題:
(1)忽略考題限定的範圍,導致討論對像出現偏差;
(2)論據過於籠統或沒有細節,或與所討論的論點沒有直接關聯;
(3)錯誤理解考題含義,討論內容答非所問。
接下來 Albert 會和大家一起探討這些問題,我們先來看三道例題:
忽略題目限定範圍而導致偏題
Some countries have an ever-increasing proportion of population who are aged 15 and younger. What is your opinion of the current and future effects it may have in those countries?
這道題看似很簡單,卻深埋三處陷阱,一不小心就會偏題。第一處陷阱是題干中的
“proportion of population”,也就是說題目強調的是“占人口的百分比”,而不是指人數;
第二處陷阱是題干中的“aged 15 and younger”,如果考生作文不強調 15 歲及以下的孩子,
而隻寫 young people 的話就偏題了,因為這樣就把討論對像的範圍擴大了;第三處陷阱是
問題中的“the current and future effects”,題目強調當前(current)和將來(future)的影響,
這兩個方面缺一不可。下面附上一篇 Albert 原創的範文供“考鴨”們參考,文中已經標出
了扣題詞和短語。
【參考範文】
In some countries, the percentage of youth who are not older than 15-years-old has
increased significantly and to a certain extent that this trend has more merits than demerits
on the society. Influences on both current and future in such nations will be discussed in the
essay.
On the one hand, the important current impact of such trend is on the national economy
and education. To begin with, the government has to invest more budgets on educational
institutes as an increasing proportion of students need more schools and universities,
which may cause financial burden on national economy, while the children are not yet
earning members thereby negatively affecting the overall economy of the country. In
addition, learners who are from poor families or not outstanding at schools may not have
any opportunity to further their studies because they may not afford the cost, especially in
developing countries.
On the other hand, there are some advantages of this development in the long term.
Firstly, young people are more energetic, talented and hard workers as compared to the
elderly. They are expected to learn professional skills related to science, medicine and
education that can provide quality services as engineers, doctors and teachers who contribute
to the economy. Secondly, their consumption demand is strong. From the financial point
of view, a rise in demand for housing and consumption will benefit some businesses. For
example, real estate and manufacturing industry will be boosted, since most young people
choose to live alone in some countries; therefore, more accommodations and domestic
appliances will be needed.
In conclusion, having high percentage of young people has both challenges and
advantages to the authorities. However, I still believe positive outcomes will exceed negative
results.
【Albert 點評】
範文 introduction 主要改寫了話題並回應題目,其中主要強調了文章的討論對像是
the percentage of youth who are not older than 15-years-old,同時對題目問題進行非常籠統
的回應。
Body paragraph 1:不斷增長的年輕人(不大於 15 歲)的比例的負面影響主要在經濟
和教育兩個方面。從經濟層面來說,政府需要建設更多的基礎設施來滿足需要,某種程
度上這會增加政府的財政負擔;從教育層面來說,年輕人比例的增加會導致入學競爭壓
力的增加。
Body paragraph 2:從長遠角度來說這個現像所帶來的積極影響:年輕人口比例的增
加在將來會促進就業人口的增加和消費能力的提升。
Conclusion:總結概括年輕人的比例的增長既有挑戰,也有利好,但是“我”相信好處
會更多一些。
例 1 剖析了審題中應該注意的問題以及如何在文章中有效地扣題,從而確保文章不偏
題,下面 Albert 陪大家來領略一下“寫作攔路虎”――論點展開 方法的問題: